New flyer

[SSS 18734]

What do you all think of this new flyer I made? Would it be effective for a 17 year old trying to get a few jobs? My main concern is that it might contain a bit too much text. What do you all think? The back is not completed yet, so any comments on that would be appraciated. Anything I should add or take out?

Thanks!
-Sergei

[MTAYLORFFP]

Maybe a little wordy...

[SSS 18734]

I think it is a bit wordy as well. Here's an update. I decided to get rid of the back page and the "about myself" section. On the front I added a few lists instead of keeping it in a paragraph format to clean it up a bit, and took out a few things.

[fiveoboy01]

That's definitely an improvement over the first one.

You might want to think about putting it in all bold and spacing things out a bit more, mabye cut down on it a bit more.

[mcwlandscaping]

make the phone number bigger and easier to find, you may also want to also go with black and white as it will make copying A LOT cheaper. You could still leave the graphics on there in that case.

[Freddy_Kruger]

Don't get rid of the back, thats where you should be listing all that stuff you do, thats where all the text should go.

Keep text to a absolute minimum (I know its hard to do) People have to be able to sumerize your flyer in seconds. Nobody is going to read all that text. 99% of your flyers go in the garbage without a 2nd glance, if you make your flyer proper with bold headlines that the eye will focuss on so they know what you're doing immediately, then maybe only 97% of your flyers end up in the trash without a 2nd glance. And thats a good thing. You see, if they are interested by a catchy front page then they want to read. and they can read the text on the back.

Are you going to print these yourself? or going to a printer?

I notice your filling up all the empty space you don't need to do that either and nobody wants to see your equipment but they want to see their lawns. Google/images lawn search. I get all my pics by googleing images. (even from other lawn companies).

Your flyer is shaping up but keep worknig on it, it takes me a good week to get my flyers in shape and as soon as they're printed I wish I would have made changes.

[All_Clear]

Sorry but it looks like a book... It's obvious you do yard work by the pictures and heading... The rest is a waste to most people.

They care what you do... and how to reach you... Frankly the rest is just taking up page...


All Clear

[Mac_Cool]

What do you all think of this new flyer I made?

I hate it.

Here is a guideline passed on to me by people who do marketing and design:

Type out your flyer, lay it on the floor at your feet, anything you can't read while standing up, delete.

I suggest finding a flyer from here:
http://office.microsoft.com/en-us/templates/CT063469251033.aspx
and modify it to fit your needs.

See attachment and preview pic of my favorite.

[causalitist]

i love your quote.

[mr mow]

you sound alittle bit desperate(Im not knocking you, we all want more jobs,but dont make make them feel obligated because of that).if youve done this for a while it will sound more confident. just my .000059cents

[Mac_Cool]

Yeah, so whatever happened with the flyer? Guy quit already?

[PMLAWN]

Skip the "My great equipment stuff" nobody cares

Skip how fast you can do it
If you do it fast they expect to pay less--- leave it out totally
I love what you are selling---- Free time---

You get the selling game:clapping: :clapping:

Most think cutting is important to people-- bull hockey-- people want to play -- not cut grass , nobody wants to cut grass so don't sell it --- everybody wants free time or Family time so sell that!!!!