Some of my ads. Question on phonebook ad

[BrendonTW]

The first two ads I have ran in a really small buyers guide and had a return much better than I expected. The third ad is a 2x5 and is going in a phonebook that is the only one circulated in my target area. About half of the people here are middle-age or older so most of them still use the phone book here. Seems perfect. Anyway - I figured the second ad was a bit wordy but it turns out it wasn't because I have had best return on it. Which is why my phonebook ad is so wordy. BUT I still wanted to get your opinions on it. As far as I know I will be one of THREE guys who is running a listing in this phonebook. So I am expecting a good return. These guys ads don't say much in them nor do they have a white background, only yellow, black and red. Mine is the max of 4 colors. White, yellow, black, red.

[casekey]

Looks good man. only problem i have with it is its all clumped together so its hard to read all the services. Where you at in okc? Im from tulsa starting up. nice to see someone local

[BrendonTW]

Yeah I'm considering removing some of the services on the list so that I can make the others bigger. I'm in southeast OKC. I come to Tulsa every now and then. I don't see many guys from OK on here so I'm glad to see you!

[casekey]

Yeah sounds good man! yeah im in okc like once or so every 2 months. yeah for sure have only seen a hand full on here.

[2brothersyardcare]

cant read sh*t

[BrendonTW]

Nice. Ok.
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[4.3mudder]

I think this is the last year for the phone book, from what I have heard.

[White Gardens]

Yellow Pages = :hammerhead::realmad::nono:

[mowerbrad]

Way too many words in a small space. You should take out some of the services, just advertise your main ones.