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Old 04-15-2013, 11:51 AM
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Agree with suggestions above. Have someone go over the text for grammar and readability.

I read your About page and would suggest some improvement there. People go to that page to learn about your company history and the people behind it. Shorten the company bio. Eliminate the comment about not being driven by profit- even if its true no one will believe it. Include a short, personable bio for each member of management or ownership. If that is just you- fine. Include a headshot. Want to differentiate yourself from Trugreen? Show that you are a person- not a corporation. Do not write like a corporation, let a bit of your personality show.
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