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Old 01-14-2014, 03:15 PM
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Please Critique this - Thanks in advance

NOTE: we are going for something VERY-VERY simple - basic -

Expect a return of .005% on 10000 flyers (if that)

My personal opinion on the changes that need to be made:

1) Font needs to be changed
2) Angies list needs to be moved to the bottom
3) change the font color on the phone number and www.address
4) Could use help on wording services for weekly mowing better ..any suggestions

Thank you for your help - HAPPY NEW YEAR - HAVE A GREAT SEASON
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Old 01-14-2014, 04:25 PM
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Im personally not crazy about the photo. Is it your logo or the colors your company wears? Looks like a homeowner mowing the lawn.

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Old 01-14-2014, 04:50 PM
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Im personally not crazy about the photo. Is it your logo or the colors your company wears? Looks like a homeowner mowing the lawn.

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i agree 100%. id also tone down the yellow a tad. do you print yourself or pay for printing?
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Old 01-14-2014, 04:59 PM
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The yellow is obviously to be eye catching, but it's painful to read with green lettering.
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Old 01-14-2014, 05:26 PM
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NOTE: we are going for something VERY-VERY simple - basic -
It seems like you're setting the table for mediocre, when you shouldn't be remotely satisfied with this. I find nothing whatsoever about it that is engaging. I'd suggest hitting Google Image Search and searching "lawn care door hangers". You'll find as much inspiration as you could possibly want.

Basic grammar seems to be a serious issue for you, so I'd recommend having someone help you revise and proof before taking the next step. For example, not only is your capitalization inconsistent, but you need a bit of punctuation. The first words you're trying to communicate are both sloppy and bordering on unintelligible.

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Old 01-14-2014, 05:48 PM
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Take a real pic of a lawn you service.

If you say "we service your neighbors lawn" that limits who can get the hanger?
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Mower dude looks like one of the guys from the emergency instructions card on an aircraft.

The whole color scheme is really dated. I'm too sick to narrow down which decade but it ain't this one

Even when I found your contact info it was hard to read

Just so we're clear, .005% of 10k is 1/2 a new client. While I admire your optimism, that alone would make me reconsider the investment
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Old 01-14-2014, 05:50 PM
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It seems like you're setting the table for mediocre, when you shouldn't be remotely satisfied with this. I find nothing whatsoever about it that is engaging. I'd suggest hitting Google Image Search and searching "lawn care door hangers". You'll find as much inspiration as you could possibly want.

Basic grammar seems to be a serious issue for you, so I'd recommend having someone help you revise and proof before taking the next step. For example, not only is your capitalization inconsistent, but you need a bit of punctuation. The first words you're trying to communicate are both sloppy and bordering on unintelligible.

Hello There!
We service your Neighbor Already
I am very thankful for your comment & understand what you are saying ..

To me .. All I want is listing basic services .. What every company normally offers ..
It's like .. We are not claiming we are better than everyone .. All I am asking from the designer - give me a bright colored flyer..
I am looking for SIMPLICITY - simple words (any changes will be welcome)
Point we are trying to make is ...
We are in your area and we will be more than happy to take upon a new customer ..
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Old 01-14-2014, 05:58 PM
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Mower dude looks like one of the guys from the emergency instructions card on an aircraft.

The whole color scheme is really dated. I'm too sick to narrow down which decade but it ain't this one

Even when I found your contact info it was hard to read

Just so we're clear, .005% of 10k is 1/2 a new client. While I admire your optimism, that alone would make me reconsider the investment


That's 1/2% return yes :-) just being realistic .. That's 50 new calls - & I doubt we will close on all 50 .. But there's definitely enough return from the investment in flyers .. Thank you again .. My main goal here is a bright colored flyer..

That's what the designer pitched .. N here we are :-)
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Old 01-14-2014, 06:07 PM
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i agree 100%. id also tone down the yellow a tad. do you print yourself or pay for printing?
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No - will get it printed professionally ..

Note taken on toning down yellow ..

Please note - this is a rough draft sent to me by the designer - based on my requirements ...

1) bright background
2) simple wording (I m definitely changing the wording).. Any suggestions welcome

Again thank you .. Sincerely
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