Criticize my proposal!!

Discussion in 'Business Operations' started by Lawnworks, Oct 24, 2004.

  1. Lawnworks

    Lawnworks LawnSite Fanatic
    from usa
    Posts: 5,407

    Well here is a proposal I turned in to an apartment complex. How can I be more specific? I usually fax these things to the mangers. Should I include a page describing my company? Any ways to spruce it up? I want it to be as professional as a Brickman proposal.
     
  2. jajwrigh

    jajwrigh LawnSite Bronze Member
    Male, from Martinsville, IN
    Posts: 1,405

    Here are some suggestions:

    Include an intro paragraph of intent to the client as to why they should choose your company.

    Add a clause about incurred late fees that is extremely specific.

    Make it clear that anything else that is to be done will require an additional service agreement to ensure that you get paid.

    Use traditional/simple fonts and make the hard copy professional and very presentable.

    Let us know how it all turns out!
     
  3. HOOLIE

    HOOLIE LawnSite Gold Member
    Posts: 3,981

    I agree with jajwrigh's comments. One other thing though, I would deliver the proposal personally to the manager rather than fax it. (Unless they ask you to fax it) Just a little more personal touch that could separate you from the competition.
     
  4. pfifla1

    pfifla1 LawnSite Member
    Posts: 45

    when i do proposals, i use adobe illustrator, i designed a template for my company which looks very professional. also, i like to add in the designated day of the week and time frame services will be completed, this is an issue for some places like country clubs, banks and doctors offices. Also i usually include my licenceing and insurance documents as verification.

    i put your file into one of my temps check it out. best of luck

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  5. BCSteel

    BCSteel LawnSite Senior Member
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    Whooo Wheee, hows about that for jazzing it up.
     
  6. pfifla1

    pfifla1 LawnSite Member
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    sorry i realized i messed up the text blocks

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  7. Lawnworks

    Lawnworks LawnSite Fanatic
    from usa
    Posts: 5,407

    Wow pfifla1 that looks incredible!! How much is adobe illustrator? Available at Staples? Looks like you have got a quick diesel too?

    Thanks for all the insight guys... keep it coming!
     
  8. pfifla1

    pfifla1 LawnSite Member
    Posts: 45

    its 1500$, i could give you a copy of it though if you wanted it. yeah just waiting on my new injectors and slicks to get me into the low 13s.
     
  9. tonygreek

    tonygreek LawnSite Gold Member
    Posts: 3,417

    Unless you have a high-tolerance for a steep learning curve, you could do the same as Pfif using a much cheaper Microsoft Publisher ($100 bucks or so), or Art Explosion Publisher Pro (also around $100), which also are very simple to use. Using Illustrator to do that is akin to hunting squirrel with a howitzer.

    And nice job, Pfif. I do something very similar, although I tend to use PageMaker - speaking of hunting with a howitzer - but use it for all of our publications.

    Oh, and the licensing guys are everywhere. you might want to restrict those kinds of "offers" to PM.

    Tony
     
  10. pfifla1

    pfifla1 LawnSite Member
    Posts: 45

    i found publisher to be the most user friendly program i have used in a while, word makes it so difficult to do the layouts, this program is easy which turns everything into static objects that can be placed anywhere.
     

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