Flyer Critique

Discussion in 'Business Operations' started by gslam88, Mar 1, 2003.

  1. gslam88

    gslam88 LawnSite Member
    Posts: 146

    OK so here is my attempt for now, let me know what you think... right or wrong

    I put this up as an adobe pdf for anyone wanting to know for opeining it
     

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  2. precisionlawn

    precisionlawn LawnSite Senior Member
    Posts: 254

    I have to say, I really dont like it. Sorry I'm just being honest. Not only that what is ENTERPSIS? Unless thats a word I was never taught in school, you better change your logo, That is your business name. You shouldnt spell that wrong.
     
  3. iclgs

    iclgs LawnSite Member
    Posts: 47

    Did you do the landscaping in the pic?? and your just started yeah right.

    and sorry but I don't like the flyer...to much text on it
     
  4. gslam88

    gslam88 LawnSite Member
    Posts: 146

    I am sorry did not spell check the page,

    Logo is Beasley Enterprises

    I cut down on it KISS method I guess it better ...

    trying to push out many different projects at the same time... will have to segment the flyers I think then.. but here is the updated try


    iclgs, I have not said if I just started or have been around doing it for a while. This my current attempt for a flyer that is all


    Pete
     

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  5. wojo23323

    wojo23323 LawnSite Senior Member
    Posts: 608

    A few suggestions:

    Products / Services

    We have expanded our offerings to include:
    (Use bullet format)
    * Mulch, Gravel, Stone, Fill and Topsoil delivery and installation.

    * Lawn maintenance, spring and fall clean-ups, power washing and snow plowing.

    * Holiday and special occasion lighting.

    * Ask about our annual agreement discounts.

    With our Premier Partners program we are also offering, flooring, tile, replacement windows, electrical work and computer installation, training, upgrades and repairs.

    Put Beasley Enterprises, LLC below the picture.

    Hope this helps.

    Wojo
     
  6. gslam88

    gslam88 LawnSite Member
    Posts: 146

    Ok here its an refined version
     

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  7. wojo23323

    wojo23323 LawnSite Senior Member
    Posts: 608

    Your latest link did not work.
     
  8. gogetter

    gogetter Banned
    Posts: 3,256

    The very last one didn't show up for me either. The second to last one worked, but I didn't like it (sorry). So unless there are significant changes on the last version, I'd say it still needs work.

    There are sentences that seem to be missing words. Example: "Installation and Delivery Mulch".

    There were a couple other sentences that didn't make sense to me either.

    Last comment, and this isn't really about the flier itself. But if I was looking for a lawn guy, I hire a lawn guy. And if I'm looking for a floor or computer guy, I hire a floor or computer guy, not a lawn guy. Maybe that's just me though.
     
  9. gslam88

    gslam88 LawnSite Member
    Posts: 146

    Well,

    I am listening to what is being said,

    Here is the latest, but I did have to shrink down the pictures to be able to post it on lawnsite, held to 157k or so ....

    hopefully it will post
     

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  10. adrianvbarrera

    adrianvbarrera LawnSite Member
    Posts: 163

    We do lawnservice, landscaping and TRAIN your monkey to dance at an hourly rate.

    Specialize a bit. This flyer gives an image of a desperate person or company. Even if you are desperate for work....don't show it. It is not good for business.


    People do not want to see too many things.

    Decide what you are strong at and advertise for that, with specific details about your specialty.

    Remember a person who is Jack-of-all trades is King of none.


    Just my thoughts.
    Adrian
     

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