What do you guys think?? Please leave input !!

Discussion in 'Business Operations' started by Clapper&Company, Jan 15, 2007.

  1. Clapper&Company

    Clapper&Company LawnSite Bronze Member
    from NE Ohio
    Posts: 1,291

    What do you guys think?? Please leave input good and bad..
     

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  2. DUSTYCEDAR

    DUSTYCEDAR LawnSite Fanatic
    from PA
    Posts: 5,137

    lose the steiner from under the mower its wasted on someone that doesn't know what it is
     
  3. garydale

    garydale LawnSite Senior Member
    Posts: 813

    Shouldn't the "a" be "and" in the first opening line?
     
  4. coolbreeze

    coolbreeze LawnSite Member
    Posts: 53

    your 'We are now accepting a renewing' text isn't correct. is it supposed to be 'accepting and renewing'? otherwise, it looks good.
     
  5. salandscape

    salandscape LawnSite Member
    Posts: 168

    In the first line do you mean accepting AND renewing clients? I would leave it at accepting new clients only, renewing them should be a given. Also in the area talking about the mild winter you have landscaping incorrectly spelled, and the comma after completing isn't needed. Also drop the s on spring in the header. Hope you are getting co-op money from Steiner to put their name in the ad, if not take it out it doesn't add to your business pitch. .
     
  6. coolbreeze

    coolbreeze LawnSite Member
    Posts: 53

    i saw the Springs thing, but thought it was a play on words. after another reading, Fertilization is incorrect. Distributor is incorrect. if you keep the Steiner thing, don't is incorrect.
     
  7. Allure

    Allure LawnSite Senior Member
    Posts: 426

    is there more than one spring? 'it's time to think spring' not 'springs'

    also, i would change 'irrigations' to 'irrigation'

    also, the 'and' thing mentioned above

    i would use less fonts. it tends to be more comfortable to read when you have fewer fonts. Ultimately it is a personal preference though.
     
  8. Allure

    Allure LawnSite Senior Member
    Posts: 426

    wow i missed those other ones. bottom line spell check & grammar check with whatever program you used to design it.
     
  9. d&rlawncare

    d&rlawncare LawnSite Senior Member
    Posts: 741

    LOTS of spelling mistakes. Look at his signature line. He cant even spell landscaping? Not trying to slam you but attention to detail! I hope you pay attention when you do your "lansaping" and before you send out your flyers.
     
  10. Clapper&Company

    Clapper&Company LawnSite Bronze Member
    from NE Ohio
    Posts: 1,291

    Wow, good looking out for me. I missed the spelling errors. The proof was sent to me today, and I posted when I got it. I can’t believe that they had that many spelling errors.

    Ill post a new proof soon..

    Thanks
     

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