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Discussion in 'Business Operations' started by Live4Mowin', Jul 1, 2003.
read and critique, please
Why are you up this early?
It's 5:30 here. You're up at 4:30 posting on the net?
Anyway, I checked your flier. Some nice phrases. Pretty much says it all.
I wouldn't stress price quite so much. At 14 they will assume you're cheaper. Maybe go with something like "competitive"rates.
Do you have a color printer? It'd be pretty easy to copy and paste a picture or something to brighten it up a little.
I also found out (on this forum) that people like to "spot" read.
I've been using the "tables" feature in Microsoft word and puting little blurbs of info in those along with an appropriate pic or logo or something. It's really helped the look of my fliers.
Maybe Jim Lewis or someone who's really good at promotions will post on this thread and we'll both learn something.
It's pretty wordy and cluttered. I'm not sure how many people are going to want to read that whole page. It is better to go with fewer words that are bigger and stress your main points like what services you provide, that you have competitive rates, and do professional work. Then put your phone number in bigger numbers because that is what you want everyone to see no matter what. I hope it goes well.
Let It Grow, is this a little less cluttered and wordy?
YES much better. If it were me, I would put my number at the very bottom, I think it would look good to have color on the top and bottom. The way you did your name and number in big bold colored letters will attract attention.
One other thing to think about is maybe adding more services. Like on my business cards and flyers I put mowing, trimming, minor landscaping, hedge trimming, yard cleanups, custom jobs.
Maybe add edging, dethatching, aerating.
Just some ideas. It's looking much better though...you are on the right track.
thank you for the guidance
Good idea, but being in marketing as my primary occupation, I would suggest cutting down the wordiness, no one wants to read alot. Potential customers like it quick and fast in advertising. Your on teh right track though.