[clean_cut]

I made this lawn care flyer on Powerpoint, but converted it to jepg, tell me what you guys think? Anything I need to change?

I'm thinking about printing of around 10 of these in color, and doing the rest of them in black and white, do you think I should change my entire design for that?

Thanks in advance.

 

[grandview (2006)]

I think you need to learn how to proof read first.

 

[Icepuck72]

spell check, and I don't know if you really need to put your age in there either.

 

[Florida Gardener]

Yes, def need to proof read. I would also take out the fact you are 14. It's great that a youngster is ambitious, but it may turn away people right away from the flyer b/c they make think you are too young.....just my opinion....

 

[bighaydenslawn]

I think you need to learn how to proof read first.

Ditto, and might be a bit busy for my taste. Keep your age off and just put your biz name, slogan, services, and number.

 

[astrohip]

Jacob... looks like you spent some effort on your flyer. I admire your hard work, and wish you good luck.

A few thoughts:

* I don't like the very top, the orange and green with white letters in the background. It's too busy. Either the white letters or the green letters would be ok, but not both.

* The top left side phrase "14 years old with over four five..." doesn't make sense.

* Near the bottom above your phone # you say " Well mow you yard...". It should be "We'll" with an apostrophe, not "Well".

* I agree with the others about your age. I'm not sure I'd show it either, but OTOH if I hired someone and a 14 yr old showed up, I might be upset. You need a way to show you are a teen, and a hard-working one, without making it too "in-your-face". Maybe mention you are a teen, but not your exact age?

Good luck!

 

[MSlawnBoy]

Very nice young man! I admire your work ethic and the desire to build your business.

Let's fix a few things, shall we?

First, I would put you phone number at the top under your co. name.

Top left corner. Remove the part about being 14 years old and correct the part the says four five.......replace with something like..."I have over 4 years of experience mowing in area neighborhoods.

Next.....bottom right.....change Well to We will......double and triple check all of your spelling before getting this printed.

Rock on young tiger!! :cool2:

 

[clean_cut]

Jacob... looks like you spent some effort on your flyer. I admire your hard work, and wish you good luck.

A few thoughts:

* I don't like the very top, the orange and green with white letters in the background. It's too busy. Either the white letters or the green letters would be ok, but not both.

* The top left side phrase "14 years old with over four five..." doesn't make sense.

* Near the bottom above your phone # you say " Well mow you yard...". It should be "We'll" with an apostrophe, not "Well".

* I agree with the others about your age. I'm not sure I'd show it either, but OTOH if I hired someone and a 14 yr old showed up, I might be upset. You need a way to show you are a teen, and a hard-working one, without making it too "in-your-face". Maybe mention you are a teen, but not your exact age?

Good luck!

Yeah, this was sorta a rough draft, so I'll proof read and change those things, I completley agree with you though, If they hire me, thinking I'm an adult, and I show up as a kid, I don't think that they would like that much.

I'll try to make it simpler too. Thanks for the replys, I'll try to get a new one up in a sec.

 

[barlowlawncare]

except for the errors I like it. I agree you should not have your age just your experience. I dont know what program you used to make it, but I am also in the process of making a brochure for our business and I bought the new microsoft publisher program and it's great! very simple to use and very professional looking! I'm not even half done but here is what i got so far

 

[clean_cut]

So how does it look now? I changed the Title to green, but it just looks like too much with the green on the side too. Any other color suggestions?

 

[mowerbrad]

It is definately much better than before. But I still see some areas to be improved. The left side of the flyer that lists your services looks too cluttered since you seperated "standard" and "other services". Combine that list into one. I would also suggest trying to shorten the list (not necessarily removing services) but take out "leaf/grass bagging" as that should be implied with the clean-up and mowing parts. Another thing to consider is the fertilizing part, if you are not licensed to apply fert, you might have some problems later on, so if you aren't licensed I would take that off. And finally, take out the part about "pine needles" and just leave "mulch spreading". Other than that I like the new set-up of it better than the first one.

 

[clean_cut]

Okay, I can't really combine the list though, since only three of the services are included, the rest are optional, what do you think?

 

[Florida Gardener]

how about "An ambitious teenager."

 

[clean_cut]

Ok I'll try that it actually sounds pretty good, should I keep "an ambitious young teenager" or "an ambitious teenager"

 

[mowerbrad]

Okay, I can't really combine the list though, since only three of the services are included, the rest are optional, what do you think?

I'm not saying that all those services will be included in mowing, but those would be the entire list of your services all in one list. You will have many people who may just want you to come out and do a fall clean-up or trim their hedges.

For example:

Services:
-Mowing
-Spring/Fall clean-up
-Hedge trimming
-Weeding
-Mulch spreading
-Light landscaping
-Aerating

The ONE list would include all of your services for people to choose from. They may not want you to mow but just trim their hedges.

 

[Ramairfreak98ss]

yeah whats that mean.

14 years old with over four five? looks ok for the layout at least.. thats all im gonna say

 

[Field King]

put "student owned business" not I am 14........

 

[clean_cut]

I'm not saying that all those services will be included in mowing, but those would be the entire list of your services all in one list. You will have many people who may just want you to come out and do a fall clean-up or trim their hedges.

For example:

Services:
-Mowing
-Spring/Fall clean-up
-Hedge trimming
-Weeding
-Mulch spreading
-Light landscaping
-Aerating

The ONE list would include all of your services for people to choose from. They may not want you to mow but just trim their hedges.

O.K. To me that makes it sould like I'm more of a one time person, not a person that comes to mow grass every week. Thats just me though.

I see what your saying, they can just look down the list and tell me what services they want, like they may want me to trim and blow weekly, but not mow. They may just want me to blow off their driveway everyweek, but not mow grass and trim. Am I right?

Who else thinks that this is a good idea?

 

[Florida Gardener]

I think it's good to just have one list. People will cherrypick what they want from it. imo, go with ambitious teenager. You dont need to be specific and this way, your letting people know your a teen, but not saying well im 13 or 14 years old....the less said the better most of the time.

 

[clean_cut]

O.K ill change some stuff and post it up a little later, thanks guys